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You stare at the night sky.
Filled with stars so bright and sparkling.
You went on, your thoughts lingered everywhere.
Sitting here, it didn't feel real.
Knowing that reality was harsh and cold.
Your heart felt heavy with darkness.
But you still wondered why you were still here.
In your eyes, you were an outcast.
To know people despise you, for reasons you don't understand.
Hatred seeps from their eyes.
You start to think,
"was I that much of a nuisance? In this society, or even in this lifetime?"
You just reply, "if only my mind wasn't so clouded of death and sorrow."
Your mind was so fragile from those bitter, spiteful blows.
You look within the ground, and see that you world is being plunged over to the darkness.
You stare into the darkness, sickened by it,
"my dark side is winning."
Your mind fights the darkness, weak, helpless, and frail.
"Will freedom come to me at last? Alas I will never know."
Damnation was here to stay.
Isolation shall engulf me.
And this disillusion will never end.
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well this is my first time lol. i wanna know what you ppl think.
lmao its so...emo XD
well not to much critism, but still honest plz <3
amd i dont really know what category to put it in so yea tell me when u read this plz <333

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:iconwhinnie10:
Ooh, nice poem! =D I feel like it's describing me, in some twisted way... =|

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It's dark, and it's beautiful, and it's haunting. It has a lot of themes I deal with, and it's very up front. I've spent many nights staring at the sky thinking, and so this really struck me. This is very good, and it is definently getting a favorite.
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o.O thank you very much that you like it. gosh i have redid this poem like three times XD so yeah i had alot of inspiration cause i deal with it alot. so yeah thanks again for adding to your faves.
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It's got a lot of words int that don't nee to be there. It's good as spoken word style. It's a great concept and theme, good work, if youd like my unoficcial edit send it to me in a DA note and I'll show you what I'd do with it, Again, good job. :thumbsup:

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:iconmagnolia-scent26:
Thanks! Just replying again because...lawls didn't realize I was commenting on the wrong thing.
FAIL. :D

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